The Old Man and The Sea

I prefar to read stories, because that easy to understand.The title is The Old Man and The Sea and it is a story about a poor old man who go fishing alone on his skiff. The book was wroten by Hemingway and printed by Charles Scribner's Son's in New York in 1952.

Little Princes

He loved the children in little princes .He did not realized how much he missed them in the last year until that day. The Civil war in Nepal became worst after he left Nepal in 2005 during that year. Before four years was an incident that made all the international headlines King Gyanendra's murdered by his son with the queen and most of the royal family. In fall 2005 the new king stopped the war. The king wants the citizens end the war and surrender without any terms. The little boys at Little Princes read newspapers every morning about the killing in their country. They read about how the rebels killed civilians and police in their country. The rebels also destroyed civilian homes. If Maoists come they have guns, so they take children and you can’t do anything against them. The houses in Nepal have flat rooftops and they serve for a good reason. Families spend more time on the rooftops then in their homes because they do many things on there.

Improving the way my writing sounds

Improving the way my writing sounds

Group 3: Grant Schow, Rakan Alolayani, Ahmed Akhwaher.

 

My Writing sounds choppy, it doesnt flow

• Transitions and linking words
• connect words, sentences and paragraphs.

• show the relationship between ideas.

• indicate the order of things and their relative importance.

• indicate when something new is coming.

• signal to readers how an idea fits in and where it's going.

• show a change is coming, i.e. introduce a new ideas.

• introduce a summary or a conclusion.

• http://www.openpolytechnic.ac.nz/study-with-us/study-resources-for-students/writing-and-formatting/how-to-write-better/how-to-make-your-writing-flow/

 

Adding parallel structure

• Thesis statement: A sentence in an essay, report, research paper, or speech that identifies the main idea and/or central purpose of the text.
• Putting the thesis statement in parallel form emphasizes the main ideas into action and give your paper purpose.
• Consider a topic such as "air pollution in Denver, Colorado, USA." If you want to write about the "causes of air pollution" (the controlling statement), your sentence at the end of the introduction could be "...so the objective of this paper is discuss the three main causes of air pollution in Denver which are (1) exhaust from automobiles, (2) soot from industry smokestacks, and (3) smoke from wood burning fireplaces." (Exhaust, soot, and smoke are all nouns which is parallel structure, but in this case, parallel structure is even more effective because the nouns are all followed by prepositional phrases.
• http://eslbee.com/parallel_structure.htm
• http://www.tutorfi.com/LanguageArts/howtoimproveessaywriting

Fix Dangling and msiplaced modifiers

• A Modifier:  is a descriptive word that describes a noun or sentence
• Avoid misplacing modifying words
• Example: ‘Sarah was voted prom queen.”
• Correct Format: “The blond girl named Sarah, who was a foreign exchange student from England, quickly climbed the ladder of popularity during her junior year, smiling her way through cheerleading and an ASB presidency term she inched near the top and was a sure fit as junior prom queen.”
• http://www.grammarly.com/handbook/sentences/modifiers/2/what-are-modifiers/

Using Better Vocabulary

• Using the same word over and over again?
• Use a Thesaurus
• Thesaurus
• A thesaurus is a collection of synonyms (words which have basically the same meaning) and antonyms (words which have basically opposite meanings).
• http://thesaurus.com/features/howtousethesaurus.html

 

 

 

 

Little Princes

The book is a true story based on Conor's life. Conor is a twenty nine years old who has a great and prestigious job but is bored. One day he decides do leave his job and go on a journey around the world. He goes to Nepal and what was supposed to be an adventure turned out to change his life. There he met with orphans which turns out they were never orphans but had families and were taken away from them by lie. The families were promised protection for the children but they were taken as child traffickers. Conor risks everything in the dangerous mountains of Nepal to reunite the children with their families.

Conor never planned on all of this and didn't even imagine how this volunteering will change his life, what turned out as an adventure continued as a volunteering for three months. Before volunteering we can see his arrogance in the beginning of the book, and we witness how his behavior changes thorough how experience. He becomes very attached and fond of the children that when time comes to leave he is reluctant. He had to leave because he already had a ticket to Thailand. We can see his fondness of his children when they ask him when he will come back he is reluctant to tell them and chooses his words wisely in order not to give them false hope. He realizes how happy the children make him and how sad he is because he is leaving. He tells them he will return in a year and he keep his word.

After he returns to volunteer again he learns that the mother of the children have shown up looking for them. A lot of these children believed that their parent were dead, but  what they didn't know is their parents were a life and lived around Nepal. Most of these children were taken by the child traffickers who promised them protection from the Maoist rebels. After he learns how the children were treated he feels even more responsible.

The book is written with humility and honesty about the difficult life of the children and the decision to find their families.  After he comes back to NJ "New Jersey" he realizes how difficult it is to adjust to the new life, and later on gets bad news about one of the children. He decides to come back but which leads him to the idea of starting a non-profit organization " Next Generation Nepal". The story is about humility. respect, love and admiration, and also full of hope and promise. By the end of the book Conor is a totally changed man, he grows to into a mature and responsible person who genuinely cares about the children willing to risk his life  in order to reunite the children with his families. This book is one that recommend to everybody to read because it teaches us humility and admiration for the children. It is one the best book I read.

Little Princes

The book is a true story based on Conor's life. Conor is a twenty nine years old who has a great and prestigious job but is bored. One day he decides do leave his job and go on a journey around the world. He goes to Nepal and what was supposed to be an adventure turned out to change his life. There he met with orphans which turns out they were never orphans but had families and were taken away from them by lie. The families were promised protection for the children but they were taken as child traffickers. Conor risks everything in the dangerous mountains of Nepal to reunite the children with their families.

Conor never planned on all of this and didn't even imagine how this volunteering will change his life, what turned out as an adventure continued as a volunteering for three months. Before volunteering we can see his arrogance in the beginning of the book, and we witness how his behavior changes thorough how experience. He becomes very attached and fond of the children that when time comes to leave he is reluctant. He had to leave because he already had a ticket to Thailand. We can see his fondness of his children when they ask him when he will come back he is reluctant to tell them and chooses his words wisely in order not to give them false hope. He realizes how happy the children make him and how sad he is because he is leaving. He tells them he will return in a year and he keep his word.

After he returns to volunteer again he learns that the mother of the children have shown up looking for them. A lot of these children believed that their parent were dead, but  what they didn't know is their parents were a life and lived around Nepal. Most of these children were taken by the child traffickers who promised them protection from the Maoist rebels. After he learns how the children were treated he feels even more responsible.

The book is written with humility and honesty about the difficult life of the children and the decision to find their families.  After he comes back to NJ "New Jersey" he realizes how difficult it is to adjust to the new life, and later on gets bad news about one of the children. He decides to come back but which leads him to the idea of starting a non-profit organization " Next Generation Nepal". The story is about humility. respect, love and admiration, and also full of hope and promise. By the end of the book Conor is a totally changed man, he grows to into a mature and responsible person who genuinely cares about the children willing to risk his life  in order to reunite the children with his families. This book is one that recommend to everybody to read because it teaches us humility and admiration for the children. It is one the best book I read.

Little Princes

The reason why he left his job was because he got bored and he needed a drastic change. He was single and had not mortgage nor had any plans to get married any time soon, so the best idea was to travel around the world and volunteer at an orphanage

The reason for Conor to leave the orphanage was because of a trip he had plan beforehand. He was to leave to Thailand in two day. It was not easy for him to leave because of all the question he got from the children asking for when he would return. The CERV staff had advised the volunters to give vague answer in onred not to give false hope to the children because very few had ever returned.
His initial reason is similar to his later reason for leaving, it is because of a planed trip around the world. Although not easy to leave Nepal he still left in order to fulfill his trip plan.

who am I

My name is Rakan Alolayani and i am from Jeddah. Jeddah is coast in the west of Saudi Arabia. I came to US in 2011.I have been in Saint Cloud for three years. I studied English as second langouge in IEC "International English Center". I started the university in Fall 2013. I live with my brother Mohsen and my cousins Mohammed, Raed, And Abbdalelah.

This post originated in my first blog.